13 August 2007

TWO TIDBITS.............found wordplay for the Poetry Train.......



Blurb #1

She smelled like nicotine
Stained fingers
Stained teeth
Stained soul


Blurb #2

Your words caress my teeth
I crunch them in my mouth
The syllables are sweet
The curses they are foul


Stak

9 comments:

Sparky Duck said...

yep, make me feel just like an idiot for smoking

Julia Phillips Smith said...

Wow - both of them are amazing. The last line of Blurb #1 - "Stained soul" - really packs a punch.

And Blurb #2's "Your words caress my teeth
I crunch them in my mouth" are fantastic.

Anonymous said...

I love both! Awesome!

Robin L. Rotham said...

You pack a lot of power in two small pieces! Awesome, Stak!

Lisa Andel said...

Liked the first one better. Hell of a punch to it.

Hope to see more of your work around the train.

Jill said...

I think I'm gonna stay away from that girl!!
I cannot really decide which one I prefer, that mean they are both good!!

Anne D said...

I like them both, but I have to admit to a fondness for the crunchy words.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

The crunchy words are Hetfield-esque. Gorgeous image, there.

I like that you say so much in few words, Stak. Leaves me wanting... well, more!

STAK said...

wow y'all.........just wow.........thank you...........