21 May 2007

LONGING..............poetry train car number five i think....




Awakened from sleep
feeling the pull
you are my gravity
I ache for you when you are away
I long for your proximity
When in the space between our bodies
The air grows small fingers
Conduits for the adoration
We share for each other
You are my complement





Rock it like you're in love......write sappy poetry for your mate..........

Stak

10 comments:

Anna J. Evans said...

I so need to write some sappy poetry for my mate! We're disgustingly in love, lol.

I really enjoyed the poem, especially the part about the 'air grows small fingers'. Sigh, that gave me a shiver in the good way.

Thanks!

Anna J. Evans

Rhian said...

hell Stak. you big ol' softy. you contain multitudes - that's so freaking adorable. I thought "The air grows small fingers / Conduits for the adoration" was outstanding.

Anonymous said...

Love poetry at its finest. I need to write down why I love my husband so much too - the only time he really knows is when I wax poetic in a card. Thanks for sharing!

My entry is also up - thinking about my trip to Greece last year (still)

Anonymous said...

I've been with my hubby for 20 years and still feel this way. Lovely poem. :)

R.G. ALEXANDER said...

you are my gravity....

I like this!

Unknown said...

Awesome. I like it.

STAK said...

Isn't love grand?............thanks all.........underneath the Napolean complex bravado laden exterior, i am a hopeless romantic......the fact that my mate is a complexly layered beautiful person with great taste in music and movies and who knows when to freak out and when to let it slide helps.........

to be honest, the line about the air growing fingers is familiar to me........although i can't say for certain, i think i may have heard it in a song.........a song i can't recall at the moment.......but damn, isn't that seriously powerful or what.......

Anonymous said...

So beautiful!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

This is the exact sentiment that led me to create Mitchell and Kerri, who then had to have this bass player around. Guy named Trevor; you might have met him at my blog.

Nice job.

Julia Phillips Smith said...

"The air grows small fingers"

There's a reason we're all commenting on this line. It's visceral and emotionally powerful. Love it!